本帖最後由 技術之達人 於 2013-1-30 22:56 編輯
中文作文 果篇帖子睇完? 睇下英文好唔好? 可以Proof-reading
慶幸的是: 我拎到OK高分 Content:32/40 Language:39/50 Organization:8/10 => 32+39+8=79/100
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Dear Kelly,
I have read your letter and you seem to have big troubles. How are you now? I hope my advices can help you.
Firstly, you mentioned that you was being suffered from insomnia. It's a huge problem of course. If you can't sleep well at night you will lose your spirit and temper, your attention will be diverted and bad for your physical and mental health. That's why you can't concentrate at school and unable to jot down the main points.
Having nightmares is awful. You may try drinking some flower tea to calm down yourself before you sleep , or you can also read a book and listen to some classical music. Be careful! Never read a horrific book before you go to the bed, otherwise you may probally have nightmares. Drinking too much coffee is bad for your body. As you are young, the chemicals in the coffee can damage your brain. You shouldn't drink coffee too much. The earlier you sleep and wake up, the more spirit you gain!
Secondly, you also mentioned that you had had a poor result in the first-term test and your parents were not happy about it. If you can sleep well and concentrate on the lessons, the problem is likely solved by itself. You mentioned that your mum had cut down on your pocket money by half. Frankly speaking, I think your mum has chosen a wrong decision. The health is always the utmost! You have to eat lunch in order to be anle to concentrate on the lessons. Suffering from hunger also cause damages on your body. You have to talk with your parents, to let them know your problems and difficulties. What you should avoid in the talk is arguing with each other. If this happened, they might think that you are nonsence and naughty. You can also reflect that you don't have enough money to have a lunch. I think they will not cut down on you pocket money anymore after they have known the reason. Will you talk with your parents?
I hope my advices can help you solve the problem. Don't be so unhappy and desperate, every things will go well soon! Hope you can solve them soon and successfully!
Cheers,
Aunt Candy
我覺得我自己今次盡左力架喇,同中文一樣,只不過唔知點解係得中文作文特別差- -
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